<?xml version="1.0" encoding="UTF-8"?><rss xmlns:dc="http://purl.org/dc/elements/1.1/" xmlns:content="http://purl.org/rss/1.0/modules/content/" xmlns:atom="http://www.w3.org/2005/Atom" version="2.0"><channel><title><![CDATA[Chapter 004]]></title><description><![CDATA[<h2><a class="anchor-offset" name="approaching-the-border"></a>Approaching the Border</h2>
<p dir="auto">The shield land pushed up through the thick mossy forest floor, appearing like snapped massive shelves of grey broken bones. Clumps of tall evergreens with branches decorated in green hanging ribbons of delicate wing moss clustered about on the wind swept hills. La Maseon stood utterly motionless. Before him the ground rolled down to a sharp valley at the bottom. Across the valley rose the towering mountain and attending ridges that formed the Lenthen (South) edge of the Black Lakes. He could peak the edges of the lake from here, and truly it was black, even in this midday sun.</p>
<p dir="auto">The forest stopped here close to the summit, some phenomenon prevented trees from growing here to the valley. Perhaps it was natural, perhaps the effort of man, or perhaps it was magical. It might be worth him inspecting closer at some future point. Whatever the case was, this is the reason this area formed one of the borders being created recently to keep the Spider Queendoms checked and contained. Easy to patrol, easy to see. Already a body of men had organized and was being formed. Known as the Trerr Valec, or Trerrvaulcers, or more colloquially, as he discovered from the locals, as the Yellow Guard. A troop of whom, with their yellow banners, and yellow tabbards, he was now watching crossing the hill in front of him.</p>
<p dir="auto">He could go and make the crossing now, but he knew it would only provoke unneeded issue with those men should he do so. And possibly the waste of their number. Le Mason’s eyes flashed with red, and he found himself on his knees, great clumps of earth and grass in his left fist, his hammer thrust deep into the ground in his right. Had he screamed? He did not know, he felt like the memory of that moment was lost. He did not think so. Rage. Brought on by the possibility of delay? If not, then what? </p>
<p dir="auto">[Should this rage episode be removed? I wrote it before you mentioned the rarity of it’s occurrence.]</p>
<h2><a class="anchor-offset" name="crossing-the-border"></a>Crossing the Border</h2>
<p dir="auto">It appeared as though the patrol had not noticed him in his moment of rage. He had waited laid out on the ground, watching the clouds. Meditating. Trying to keep his mind empty of all. Looking for the comfort of nothingness. He accomplished the trying and looking part. A growing concern was that such meditation was a fools task made for fools. Or was that just a rationalization to excuse his own inabilities?</p>
<p dir="auto">It was now an hour after sunfall. He stood.</p>
<p dir="auto">The patrol had passed this area hours before. He was certain he had minimized the danger of encountering them. He couldn’t take into account patrol frequency, it would require too much time to discover what that was, and also increase the risk of being found and confronted. He would go now.</p>
<p dir="auto">Le Mason, strode out of the small copse of trees at the top of the hill and started loping down towards the lake with great strides, seemingly heedless of the rough variance of the wild terrain. He made quick time and soon reached the sharp termination of the slope in its narrow valley. He turned towards the water run and flowed the small rivulet towards the edge of the lake.</p>
<h2><a class="anchor-offset" name="the-lake"></a>The lake</h2>
<p dir="auto">The lake was indeed a broad expanse of darkness. At night it should be a reflection of the nightly heavens, but even those seemed dulled. Le Mason estimated a diminishment in brightness in those reflections of at least half. How was that possible? Contemplating this query he came upon another, lake bodies typically had their flows and currents dictated to by wind movement​ yet this lake seemed overly placid in the face of the strong breezes he could feel pulling at his beard. Sure the lake surface was affected, but it seemed only to be very reluctant in doing so.</p>
<p dir="auto">Sticking his hand into the water at the edge the water seemed normal. Perhaps the strange effects only occurred towards the deeper parts. It was hard to judge but the shore did indeed seem to reflect more brightly.</p>
<p dir="auto">As he understood the map given him, this shore formed part of the patrolled border, the large mountain to Alus (East) was used for the Trerrvaulcers as a means to watch and as a location to locate their central command, and they had created a large depot guarded by a fortress on the spur of land that ran into the middle of the lake. He could not make out any of their structures in the darkness, and knew that in any case the Yellow Gaurd used hidden lookouts that frequently changed to keep watch. If they had noticed them he had no indication. The efficacy of the whole enterprise of the Yellow Gaurd seemed questionable in his mind. The logistical complications alone… Did the Gaurd really think it could stop the Queens if those Queens decided to expand?</p>
<p dir="auto">He decided to skirt along lake shore to the left and around the Naulen (West) side. The terrain there was subject to become very rough according to the map, with shear cliffs likely going right to the edge of the lake, but he felt that in his current state it would provide less hindrance than actually having to deal with the Guard.</p>
<p dir="auto">Le Macon walked along the pebble strewn shallows, keeping his view to his right and the lake. As he proceeded the shore was indeed becoming far rougher and the left landward side increasing in steepness and becoming far more broken up as it dis so. Many sheered, shard edged boulders now had to be circumnavigated, and he was getting pushed farther out into the lake.</p>
<p dir="auto">Once he was up to his knees in the water , Le Macon, decided to pause. He could indeed see sheer cliffs now encroaching on the shore and at some points the water itself, up ahead. Inevitably he’d be pushed far out enough that he’d either have to walk the bottom, or swim. And he had no idea how steep the terrain was under the lake. Nor of the currents.</p>
<p dir="auto">Dipping his hand into the water again and bringing it up he could perceive something else in the water. It fell from his hand with the water. He bent down for a closer look. Trailing through his hands with thin long traces of black fibers, in fact, it was hair. Looking further out over the lake he finally noticed something that had been niggling at him at the back of his mind.</p>
<p dir="auto">Ever since he had again risen, he had been able to see more than that which light illuminates. Or perhaps it was a different sense. But through out the world he could now see the silvery iridescent threads of life and all they gave shape to, or at least a little bit. He was told, by those who also introduced him to the council that it was a latent form of Veil Sight, and could possibly be developed. He was also told that his manifestation of it was just very low, but that others had full access to it should they desire. He wasn’t sure he did. He worried it would pull at him too hard.<br />
And that was the anomaly that was now disturbing him, a noticeably subdued amount of the tendrils of life that should be covering and emerging from the lake.</p>
<p dir="auto">‘So,’ he said, ‘this is the start of the Queendoms.’</p>
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<p dir="auto">Note: Four directions (perhaps more?) Alus= East, also the prime direction people refer to, Lenth[en] = South, Naul[en] = West [All subject to change and refinement, Ziath = North?</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/topic/43/chapter-004</link><generator>RSS for Node</generator><lastBuildDate>Sat, 15 Aug 2026 22:13:05 GMT</lastBuildDate><atom:link href="https://forum.floatiron.cloud/topic/43.rss" rel="self" type="application/rss+xml"/><pubDate>Thu, 02 Jul 2026 21:41:06 GMT</pubDate><ttl>60</ttl><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Tue, 11 Aug 2026 08:26:52 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">WFR is more self directed roleplaying writing, or at least as I was conceiving it.  Basically the author/player is handing it back to the GM when they decide they want outside/GM input in the story.  It’s a way of writing where the player has all the control they want within the parameters of the world and setting, but can always reach out for  things unforeseen or unknown or alternative to help reset or whatever is required at the moment.</p>
<p dir="auto">So it could be back and forth every paragraph (though I see logistical issues arising with that, since we can’t even arrange a couple of hours for a live game), or it could be pages and pages of writing and then throwing it back to the GM for a small section, before continuing on.  Or it could be one day a back and forth, the next day pages and pages.</p>
<p dir="auto">I think WFR stands for Writing, Free-Roleplay.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/422</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/422</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Falconius]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Tue, 11 Aug 2026 08:26:52 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Mon, 10 Aug 2026 22:11:37 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">I had thought the WFR writing format was going to be more back and forth, editing and re-editing, each piece, and writing smaller sections. <img src="https://forum.floatiron.cloud/assets/plugins/nodebb-plugin-emoji/emoji/android/1f937.png?v=b052e1d78ea" class="not-responsive emoji emoji-android emoji--shrug" style="height:23px;width:auto;vertical-align:middle" title=":shrug:" alt="🤷" /> <img src="https://forum.floatiron.cloud/assets/plugins/nodebb-plugin-emoji/emoji/android/1f937.png?v=b052e1d78ea" class="not-responsive emoji emoji-android emoji--shrug" style="height:23px;width:auto;vertical-align:middle" title=":shrug:" alt="🤷" /> <img src="https://forum.floatiron.cloud/assets/plugins/nodebb-plugin-emoji/emoji/android/1f937.png?v=b052e1d78ea" class="not-responsive emoji emoji-android emoji--shrug" style="height:23px;width:auto;vertical-align:middle" title=":shrug:" alt="🤷" /></p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/421</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/421</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Hexlor]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Mon, 10 Aug 2026 22:11:37 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Mon, 10 Aug 2026 05:00:49 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">Feel better, <a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: falconius">@<bdi>falconius</bdi></a> , sorry to hear that.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/418</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/418</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Mon, 10 Aug 2026 05:00:49 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Sun, 09 Aug 2026 17:46:34 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">I don’t even know what that means… so no…</p>
<p dir="auto">I will note I’ve had an ear infection for the last couple of days which may delay my work on the next bit.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/411</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/411</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Falconius]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Sun, 09 Aug 2026 17:46:34 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Sun, 09 Aug 2026 05:08:57 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<blockquote>
<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/hexlor" aria-label="Profile: Hexlor">@<bdi>Hexlor</bdi></a> <a href="/post/405">said</a>:</p>
<p dir="auto">I thought you were going to edit your parts into what <a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: falconius">@<bdi>falconius</bdi></a> had written in chapter 004</p>
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<p dir="auto">Truth is, if that had been the plan, I’d lost track of it. <a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: falconius">@<bdi>falconius</bdi></a> did you want me to make a pass on 004?</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/409</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/409</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Sun, 09 Aug 2026 05:08:57 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Fri, 07 Aug 2026 12:02:58 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">Numbers dont mean anything except what they are assigned to mean.  Here, the order of installments.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/408</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/408</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Falconius]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Fri, 07 Aug 2026 12:02:58 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Fri, 07 Aug 2026 09:02:42 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">Shouldn’t this be numbered as Chapter 001, as the previous three instalments were titled as Intros and set years before this chapter?</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/406</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/406</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Hexlor]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Fri, 07 Aug 2026 09:02:42 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Fri, 07 Aug 2026 08:59:12 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/quint" aria-label="Profile: Quint">@<bdi>Quint</bdi></a> I thought you were going to edit your parts into what <a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: falconius">@<bdi>falconius</bdi></a> had written in chapter 004, but I see you’ve submitted a new chapter (005, which I look forward to reading shortly). Nevertheless, chapter 004 remains incomplete as there are some sections in brackets which look to have been awaiting <a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/quint" aria-label="Profile: quint">@<bdi>quint</bdi></a> input and amendment. Particularly, the below section:</p>
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<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: Falconius">@<bdi>Falconius</bdi></a> <a href="/post/272">said</a>:</p>
<p dir="auto">[Should this rage episode be removed? I wrote it before you mentioned the rarity of it’s occurrence.]</p>
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<p dir="auto">Have I understood this correctly, or was this just a writing note, within <a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: falconius">@<bdi>falconius</bdi></a> chapter, to come back to himself and refine?</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/405</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/405</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Hexlor]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Fri, 07 Aug 2026 08:59:12 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Tue, 28 Jul 2026 05:21:13 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">I should be close to done now, over 2k words, but I’m happy with it. It still needs some finishing touches.</p>
<p dir="auto">It gets through the first couple of lines of dialogue between Le Maçon and a Spider Queen at the bottom of the lake. As usual, I have a ton of thoughts about her, where the conversation could go, etc, but I think the better part of valor should be not trying to lock in too much. I’ll share the better ideas (imho) I’ve had about her backstory when I post.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/380</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/380</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Tue, 28 Jul 2026 05:21:13 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Sun, 26 Jul 2026 16:43:19 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: falconius">@<bdi>falconius</bdi></a> (and I guess <a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/hexlor" aria-label="Profile: hexlor">@<bdi>hexlor</bdi></a> too, why not) I have a draft of the next piece, there are some parts I’m working on touching up. I’m hoping I can land it sometime this week.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/372</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/372</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Sun, 26 Jul 2026 16:43:19 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Tue, 21 Jul 2026 14:23:51 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<blockquote>
<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: Falconius">@<bdi>Falconius</bdi></a> <a href="/post/360">said</a>:</p>
<p dir="auto">Do you want a back and forth? That might be difficult if we take into account communication delays. Or do you want to maybe suggest the questions or conversation he’d seek to have, and then i do the same snd then have one of either of us write it?</p>
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<p dir="auto">Both are very interesting ideas. Let’s try the second (to avoid scheduling issues, like you pointed out). I’d get the chapter up to the conversation (I’m pretty close to that, but it’s a rough draft and there are some parts I really want to clean up), and then I’ll make a separate post about what I’m thinking (questions/the convo Le Maçon would want to have).</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/361</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/361</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Tue, 21 Jul 2026 14:23:51 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Tue, 21 Jul 2026 12:52:37 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">Do you want a back and forth?  That might be difficult if we take into account communication delays.  Or do you want to maybe suggest the questions or conversation he’d seek to have, and then i do the same snd then have one of either of us write it?</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/360</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/360</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Falconius]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Tue, 21 Jul 2026 12:52:37 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Tue, 21 Jul 2026 12:28:42 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: falconius">@<bdi>falconius</bdi></a> my original plan had been to write an entire encounter with a Spider Queen in the lake. That would be a big chapter. Now I’m wondering if it might be better off if I just get the story up to them being able to have a conversation, and then hand it back to you. Do you have any thoughts or preferences?</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/359</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/359</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Tue, 21 Jul 2026 12:28:42 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Sun, 19 Jul 2026 18:22:09 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">Got started today. Not 100% sure how much I have left, I might be ~50% through.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/354</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/354</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Sun, 19 Jul 2026 18:22:09 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Mon, 13 Jul 2026 11:23:35 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">aaa I forgot about this yesterday and got caught up with other stuff. (Sunday is usually my writing day.) I’ll see where I can fit it in, not sure I’ll be able to get it out during the week this week, but will make an effort. (Not bc of pressure, I’d prefer it that way myself.)</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/339</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/339</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Mon, 13 Jul 2026 11:23:35 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Thu, 09 Jul 2026 13:57:56 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/quint" aria-label="Profile: Quint">@<bdi>Quint</bdi></a> Probably should.</p>
<p dir="auto">I had nothing in particular in mind, no.  Other than the lake being occupied.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/317</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/317</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Falconius]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Thu, 09 Jul 2026 13:57:56 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Thu, 09 Jul 2026 11:54:24 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: Falconius">@<bdi>Falconius</bdi></a> I’m thinking that I’d probably write Le Maçon going into the lake, should I just make up what happens, or do you have something specific in mind?</p>
<p dir="auto">Even to make up what happens, I’d want to get a clearer picture of Spider Queens in general, what their “powers” are, etc. I could start a new thread about that, I probably should.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/315</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/315</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Thu, 09 Jul 2026 11:54:24 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Tue, 07 Jul 2026 00:48:17 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">Would it?  For a mouse?  I dont know.  It might be that something like that just sinks, immediately.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/294</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/294</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Falconius]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Tue, 07 Jul 2026 00:48:17 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Mon, 06 Jul 2026 20:12:26 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<blockquote>
<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: Falconius">@<bdi>Falconius</bdi></a> <a href="/post/290">said</a>:</p>
<p dir="auto">I assume if he threw a small animal in the lake it would drown, probably just from getting caught up and tangled in the hair.</p>
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<p dir="auto">The hair wouldn’t animate or anything? That’s my main question. I’d be thinking of having him explore it more, debating what to write. Do you have something set for that, or should I make it up?</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/293</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/293</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Mon, 06 Jul 2026 20:12:26 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Mon, 06 Jul 2026 19:51:11 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<blockquote>
<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/hexlor" aria-label="Profile: Hexlor">@<bdi>Hexlor</bdi></a> <a href="/post/285">said</a>:</p>
<p dir="auto">As a grammatical point, the spelling of Le Macon is inconsistent in this chapter but that may just be a typo.</p>
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<p dir="auto">As a group, we’ve been spelling things inconsistently for a while now, tbh. My favorite is Magikar/Majikar, for which my personal headcanon is that it’s spelled differently in different parts of the world, which is imho highly believable. We can add this to the list.</p>
<p dir="auto">(I actually just keep Le Maçon in my clipboard when I’m writing him so I can just ctrl+v in without needing to find the <code>ç</code> somewhere to copy-paste in, fwiw.)</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/292</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/292</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Quint]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Mon, 06 Jul 2026 19:51:11 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Mon, 06 Jul 2026 17:53:42 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/quint" aria-label="Profile: Quint">@<bdi>Quint</bdi></a> Yes, Lenth/Southern side, heading Naulen/East around it, the lake is one the map and is nestled in the mountians.   Heading along this shore he is now encountering mountainous terrain that marches right into the lake.  I assume if he threw a small animal in the lake it would drown, probably just from getting caught up and tangled in the hair.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/290</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/290</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Falconius]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Mon, 06 Jul 2026 17:53:42 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Mon, 06 Jul 2026 17:47:28 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/hexlor" aria-label="Profile: Hexlor">@<bdi>Hexlor</bdi></a> I like exploring words and names by trying them out and seeing what clicks and sticks.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/289</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/289</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Falconius]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Mon, 06 Jul 2026 17:47:28 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Mon, 06 Jul 2026 16:47:14 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto">I like how you’ve written this but left points for Rocky to insert his character’s reactions.<br />
I was agree with Rocky’s point about the Spider Queens, since the 3rd Intro sends Le Macon on a mission to discover escaped Magikar victims, and was not expecting Spider Queens to show up, or at least Le Macon would not be expecting them.<br />
As a grammatical point, the spelling of Le Macon is inconsistent in this chapter but that may just be a typo.</p>
]]></description><link>https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/285</link><guid isPermaLink="true">https://forum.floatiron.cloud/post/285</guid><dc:creator><![CDATA[Hexlor]]></dc:creator><pubDate>Mon, 06 Jul 2026 16:47:14 GMT</pubDate></item><item><title><![CDATA[Reply to Chapter 004 on Mon, 06 Jul 2026 15:02:30 GMT]]></title><description><![CDATA[<p dir="auto"><a class="plugin-mentions-user plugin-mentions-a" href="/user/falconius" aria-label="Profile: falconius">@<bdi>falconius</bdi></a> ok, I’ve given this a better read now.</p>
<p dir="auto">My one overarching comment is if it’s worthwhile for Le Maçon (or the Council) to even know that the Spider Queens exist. The way I’d imagined it when I was writing is that the Council knew <em>something</em> was there, knew it was some kind of escaped Magikar/Mageum experiment, but that they didn’t have details. Le Maçon would be a kind of First Contact scenario.</p>
<p dir="auto">Figured it’s both good on the horror side of things, and also fits me as the author since I also don’t really know much about them, even if it’s a smidgen more than I’m proposing Le Maçon would know.</p>
<p dir="auto">Secondly, just to make sure I’ve got the details right: Le Maçon is by the southern side of a lake or series of lakes (I see they’re called the Black Lakes, not sure if they’re interconnected like most of the Great Lakes or not). The water is strange - it doesn’t reflect the night sky as much as it should, it has a marked lack of life energy, and there seems to be a lot of long, black hair in it. Is that right?</p>
<p dir="auto">Would he be able to progress around the lake? I’m debating his options. Truth is, in terms of exploring options, assuming he’s able to trap a rodent or small animal, are you able to tell me what would happen if he throws it in?</p>
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