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    @quint I’m having a time crunch with another project that I’m having a meeting about on Sunday afternoon. I was hoping I’d be able to write this on Motzi Shabbat (well actually I was hoping I’d get to it last night but I had to do the other thing), but I probably won’t be able to get to it till Sunday night.
  • Intro 001

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    Kind of. The issue is it makes the following year counts and time lines sound strange. For instance with the guy saying “Three months to know…” Obviously Beaumont was already there for 8 years, doing who knows what, but he definitely knew the place pretty well after 8 years. It raises the question of what he spent the three months actually doing? Checking the books, making calculations, what? And why would they choose him? If he comes from outside the work site, and the consultation is the first time he’s actually inspected the site, seen the books and made the calculations it makes a bit more sense. Especially given that “…they’d both been simple masons on the cathedral in Roche-Verte a quarter of a century ago.” It makes it sound like Arnaud and him are work always working together, but if Beaumont is not the master of the site, and hadn’t risen to master previously, how could he keep his right hand man around for all that time? I think you should just drop that whole sentence.
  • Intro 003

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    I remember you mentioning that the Powder Cumulate were human, but hadn’t realized that the White Council weren’t Venge - I’ll change it to ‘The Venge’.
  • Squeendom WIP

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    Haha yeah I saw that too and couldn’t help having the same thought. Also, most of those little Queendoms are eponymous. Only I think that I was thinking it’d be said closer to ‘sigh-lean’ rather than the normal pronunciation of Celine.
  • World Map WIP just for orientation

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    very kewl
  • Intro Bio

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    Agreed on the age, I’m fine with whatever you think on the mouth - you get portraits much better than I do.
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    I think I’d meant the memories - I edited both in.
  • Note on Intro - Read Intro's in the Chapters Section Before Bio

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    I’d recommend reading the Intro stories (001-003) before reading the bio - I think the stories illustrate Le Maçon far better than the bio, and that the bio is better for reference. Oh, and I play very fast and loose with canon here, and am happy to iterate to get things better in line, if needed.
  • Chapter 17

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    Ok, I’m due a re-read! But the Loveless is basically located in the Waistrails (Wasteland). I just wasn’t aware of it’s proper name.
  • Lineage

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    This is what I got so far: family_line | kinship_line | hierarch_order | species -------------+-----------------------+----------------------------+--------- Baliot | Cobalt High Families | Imperial Royal Lineages | Human Lorease | Cobalt High Families | Imperial Royal Lineages | Human Auno Troa | Cobalt High Families | Imperial Royal Lineages | Human Uelthon | Cobalt High Families | Imperial Royal Lineages | Human Celase | Cobalt High Families | Imperial Royal Lineages | Human Rasaes | Merr Holy Families | Imperial Royal Lineages | Human Ard | Merr Holy Families | Imperial Royal Lineages | Human Tharnyl | Patriotes Agnoa Morfa | Avjunct Principas Imperius | Human Thalaestai | Patriotes Agnoa Morfa | Avjunct Principas Imperius | Human Blevunoe | Patriotes Agnoa Morfa | Avjunct Principas Imperius | Human Eblersoph | Noth Fexo Goeish | Majikar Lineages | Human Vina | Noth Fexo Goeish | Majikar Lineages | Human
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